INTERNECION I try to give my characters a more standard fear. Your character regains what they lose and has no chance of death, and are literally friends with a god. Mine are small even in their own story, a minor speck in an ocean of death and dust. I try to balance a feeling of there being no such thing as a true, final victory. there is no major goal, other than one that is standard for all:
Survive, and do what you think is right. I then make these conflict often. Sometimes they choose do what's right and survive, some times they die, and sometimes they do neither. Rogue, who has no memory, barely knows why, and has no way or hope of regaining hers, and yet she still can't stop wondering who she is. She doesn't get small glimpses or flashbacks. I try my best to make it so that there are small victories, nice moments to keep the plot upbeat, but the characters may rest. To avoid a power creep, I make sure that everyone is weak-ish in one way or another.
Yours may be better for an epic saga where they save the world, and honestly, those are good.
Mine is just an entertaining ordeal. No glory or anything like that, and my characters could be literally anyone. (except rogue because she's literally an escaped experiment but then again we don't actually know who so yeah).

    INTERNECION but your story seems as good as mine if not slightly better.
    Not for lack of power creep or anything, but your characters are far harder to just come up with.
    I have to base all my characters off of something, and although that keeps them far more grounded, it also makes it harder to make them pop out. As I tend to stay to a semi-realistic-or-at-least-not-people-in-spandex-costumes writing style, It makes it harder to make them pop out, as I need to answer where they get everything they have.
    If I were to try writing a single magic artifact, I would feel the need to write a whole entire "Science" system to it, making it no longer magic by grounding it with laws, not rules. If someone were to get like, a super powerup thing, I would screw it up by adding in something like the laws of physics somehow. I'm bad at making my own base lore, you know? I can't really write a new race or species of people without giving an explanation, and a god or fairy creating them just makes more issues. but you somehow manage to make all that hide behind the seams.

        -wyi Well one thing I did in order to not have to explain everything is by setting most of my story in a place where magic and superhuman abilities are common. Which is also one that was already established by the people of the Hyun's Dojo Community. And then I focus on just my duelist's story while everyone else does their own thing. Your story is being set in a place where we don't know to much about, which can be quite difficult and I respect that you're going for something like that.
        I made Neeko and Blip more than a decade ago when I was just learning to draw. Kiki is my friend's, well..., Kiki's, character that I wanted to be in the story because they were perfect for the role. I didn't base them on anything at the time, until I started adding stuff in. I make sure to hide in everything and slowly reveal what exactly is going on, but in a way that I don't reveal too much for it to make sense. Putting the audience into the main characters shoes. Even though I made Neeko kinda dumb, he still has to figure things out on his own with Blip with Kiki on the sidelines figuring things out as Neeko does.

        Alright now to the lore part. Coming up with and introducing a new race of people or animal can be a bit difficult. Neeko being from seemingly long gone race, while Blip is a mythical dragon with powers a normal dragon wouldn't have like healing fire and hypnotism. A good way to show what they can do is also making it so their abilities come in gradually and not all in your face. Same thing goes with lore. I don't like to exposition dump all that much anymore. I'll use it for a gag, sure, but not for a story were someone doesn't know where they are, especially who they are. That's overwhelming for both the audience and the main character. But yeah.
        also I have this:
        The first three people Neeko and Blip will have to battle. Player X, Adelie Glace, and Leif and Wither (Someone with split personalities). The person on the far right is not either of those names, but Neeko's abuser from the past, named Leira.

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            -wyi sometimes you don't need to explain something in depth. For example lets say that there's this sceptor that can throw lightning. You could say that it's either inexplicable, some kind of magic, hard to comprehend, or it converts energy into bolts of lightning. Unless that thing has to be explained by some super smart expert scientist doctor kind of guy then there's is no need. I avoid explanation by saying that those people used to be there, now they are not, here's this one kid who survived, use him as an example of what these people could've been able to do while you piece things together using said kid's findings of his past life. or here's a mythical dragon whose still a baby. Watch how he grows so you can see the abilities, habits, intelligence, and evolution. If a god were to have created them just say a god who has been here since the beginning of time, or who got his powers from somewhere, created these people or animals to produce life and watch it prosper or he got bored. Unless you have to explain it in an extremely thorough fashion then there's no need to explain in the first place. Just like how Gandalf could've used the birds to fly them to Mordor. Even the creator didn't want to explain that. Have fun with it. Fix the plotholes when you find them but don't overthink it.

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                ay story talk is happening in here! That gives me an idea actually

                INTERNECION changed the title to Posting Art until I forget to + story sharing cuz why not? .

                here i'll share a story:

                Once upon a time there was a religion. This wasn't any old religion, but a good religion.
                One that people liked.

                This religion had three principles.

                The first principle was that you are the only one. Consciousness has always been a difficult concept to grasp. The good religion did away with having to grasp it, as it explained to everyone, you are the only one to ever have consciousness!
                As it turns out, there are actually a lot of difficult concepts to grasp. Another big one is death. Like, what happens to your consciousness when you die, does it just, like, go away? With the good religion people didn't have to question this. What a silly idea, they'd think, my being simply ceasing to be?
                Sure, they'd see people dying around them, but remember, they don't have consciousness. Only you do. This means that you're destined to never die, as it's simply ridiculous for consciousness to somehow die.
                Then, on their deathbed, the followers of the good religion suddenly realize that they're going to die, and that their consciousness is going to cease to be. They feel pain, realizing they've followed a lie their entire lives, and they cry out and warn others that the good religion is a lie in the moments before their death. But no one ever listens, because to them, they're the only ones with consciousness and the guy dying is just some random figment of assembled particles.
                But the important thing is, the good religion granted happiness. The happiness that you're better than everyone else, the happiness that lasts your entire life until you realize your mistake in the moments before your death.
                And that happiness is what we all really strive to find, isn't it?

                The second principle is that evolution has led everyone else to act like they have consciousness, but they really don't. The fact that other people die is proof that they don't have being. Being cannot be simply destroyed, it is impossible to fathom such a thing. This supplies everyone with the feeling of superiority that we need to have.

                The third and final principle is that you should share your consciousness with no one.
                You are the only one alive, no one else can feel or enjoy.
                You do not need to prove your consciousness or superiority with anyone, because they are not.
                The only person with consciousness is you.
                You know this to be true because you are currently experiencing it.

                In the good religion, there is no worship. You are god. You will live forever.
                The world is yours to experience.

                  ignorance is happiness what is the point of knowing all about death itself
                  that or nihilism

                  why was the first principle so long
                  now that begs the assumption who here is the conscious one, because im pretty sure all of us can think, at least i hope so
                  i know i can think (or am i programmed to say that?)

                  also this is not a religion, but an ideology

                  ackvonhuelio What in the reverse 1984 is this? I like it! I could use this for like a dark short story. maybe for an animation project.

                    INTERNECION actually the location of palmsheer woods is just a mostly normal suburban town in The middle of freaking nowhere, FL, but with a cartel like gang running things a good bit.

                      INTERNECION The issue with that is that when I do that nothing has any set limits so it’s hard for me to come up with a reason for characters not to just be like “Yeah I’ll just use magic to resolve half the conflict”

                          ackvonhuelio Dude wtf I think you’re just the best writer here because holy fuck my man

                            ackvonhuelio Meanwhile the exact opposite of this exists in Oneshot, and it’s just as bad if not worse. There is a computer who is conscious but does not recognize themselves as such. It’s depressing as fuck, I highly recommend.”

                              You know what I think maybe we should all try working together to make like an online animation studio and stuff. Could you imagine that, like if we just started literally making tv shows together? All we’d really need is to find a few people who are pretty good at voicing stuff, and I already am getting a pc that can run blender this summer and plan on learning to animate stuff and make models. (Somehow.) If we all worked together, we’d probably make some pretty good stuff, as I have a very good concept of 3d space and stuff, while Internection already has pretty amazing 2d animation, which I could also probably help on a little. (but like this shouldn’t start happening Right Now) (like a little while later would be good)

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